Selasa, 27 Mei 2014

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My Mother

Love at the first sight. I believe love at the first sight because I love my mother since I opened my eyes for the first time. Everybody loves their mother.  Mother is who make us been here. I love my mother so much. She is the most inspiring person of my life. She is beautiful, wonderful, has a good personalities and she is my best friend.
My mother is the most beautiful woman for me. She is thin and tall. She has medium curly hair. She loves it so much. She always cuts her hair every three month to keep it health. Her dark eyes are so calm.  She has flat-nosed.  Both of them is resemble to mine. She has fair complexion but unfortunately I do not have same complexion like her.
My mother is not just has beautiful appearance. When you look into her eyes, you will know she is a good woman. My mother is a kind-hearted woman. She is a polite person. She is also very patient. She is never angry with her children.
Can you imagine the strength of a mother? She give birth her children and look after them with all of her life. My mother is my hero. For 18 years I ever have seen my mother suffer from pain and depression. She has many problems in her life. She has a big responsibility. She works all the day and when she comes home she had to provide food for her family. She help their children do their homework and sometimes play with hr youngest son but she never complains t all. She never shows her sadness to her children. Her smile lights my life.
My mother always has been there for me. We are very close. When I was trouble she used to support me. She would listen carefully to my problem and give me some advice or solution. She very understands me. Sometimes even though I do not tell my problem to her she will know that I’m not fine. She always knows my fake smile. My mother is the most inspiring person of my life. She is beautiful and if you meet her you will know that she is a good woman. She never shows her sadness to her children. She very understands me and always has been there for me. Someday, I will be a wonderful mother like her.

5 komentar:

  1. Yes, I really agree with you, Padmi.
    Mother is everything for me. I love her since I saw her for the first time. :)
    I also really like your writing. You describe your mother clearly. Your content is so interesting.
    However, I saw that you have some mistakes on grammar.
    For example, one of the sentence in fourth paragraph, you wrote, "She help their children do their homework and sometimes play with hr youngest son but she never complains t all."
    I personally think, it should be, "She helps their children to do their homework and sometimes plays with her youngest son, but she never complains at all."
    Overall, you have done your writing. I love it. Keep writing :)

    BalasHapus
  2. I find some inappropriate grammar on your writing
    example: She give birth her children > i think it's better to use "She give birth to her children"

    well, i think the story is good and well written
    good luck :D

    BalasHapus
  3. I agree with Widya and Bhisma in which you need to pay attention with the grammar,,,
    But, overall, your writing is good and the organization as well,,,
    Keep working.... :)

    BalasHapus
  4. Widya, Bhisma, Ita@ I always have trouble with my grammar, thank you for the correction my friends. We are lucky to have the best mother in our life.
    thank you for visiting my blog. Good Job for us,,,,

    BalasHapus
  5. Yeah, the love power of our mother is strong

    BalasHapus